Fan Fiction Idea

[adam blue]

Wow! That tanker looks realy realistic!! Well done. Yeah the sea looks like blue custard!
Yeah it's amazing when you read it, after leaving it for a few days, you notice things that you didn't see before. Weired ha?

[Nike]

Indeed, and I still keep changing a few little things. But it's definitely better then the first draft What I noticed the most was that there was so much information missing, stuff that you see clearly in your head is just missing on paper

Anyways, I've also did a new 3D model, it was based on an idea that I read in a paper at work, there is a Dutch company called Plantlab that has this concept of developing laboratories underneath all mayor supermarkets and that they grow their own fruit and vegetables under perfect controlled conditions (humidity, light, uv, temperature. Everything specific to that crop for perfect quality, and it goes right into the store, so it is fresh) Although the idea is not really realistic, as it would cost millions of dollars to build that underneath every store, the idea is something worth exploring. So I thought ''what if every major city has a facility like that, and they ''farm'' for the whole region'' And what if the Mysterons poison the water pipes to the facility that causes all the fruits and vegetables to be lethal? So that was the idea for another fanfic, and I modelled a futuristic supermarket with ''Plantlab'' Facility in the background, I also retextured the ''Trans Global Truck'' in a ''Distri-Food'' style (which is my own futuristic supermarket chain)

The basic idea was that the Mysterons replicate one of the plumbers called to fix a broken water pipe, and that he poisons the water which in turn poisons the products which end up in stores and could kill thousands...



And if you're having problems viewing the whole image, or if you're seeing only part of it, just click here:
http://nikedorchain.deviantart.com/art/ ... -306100097

Not sure if I should open a new topic for my renders, or keep it in one? It would keep it a bit tidy if I would just have one topic right?

Anyway, is this a good idea or stupid or what? It was kinda inspired by a program that I was watching with my ex girlfriend a few months ago about a skin disease (Epidermolysis bullosa) which causes the skin to get blisters and simply fall off when experiencing friction... That would be really nasty if the Mysterons would use a modified version of that disease, And of course the NCS episode ''Touch of the Reaper'' and the OCS episode ''Place of the Angels'' so the concept is not something that is getting to far away from the original series, which is something I like to do. Keep the same style and think up my own situations, there are thousands of ways the Mysterons could get to us, and I got plenty of ideas, but to turn those in full stories is a real challenge, but I like to work out all the ideas I have

[Skybase Girl]

It's a very good idea, Nike. I wish I had your imagination in coming up with suitable plots! You should definitely go with your ideas, especially if your stories can be supplemented with your excellent art work.

I don't know about you, but I find as an NCS writer, a particular stumbling block is that the Mysterons don't seem to announce the threat in advance. Each episode of the original series was prefaced with a cryptic message regarding the target. The cat and mouse situation was that Spectum had to decode the message and eliminate the threat before it could be carried out.

That does at least clarify where the information comes from - all they have to do is work out where and how. For a writer, that gives you a framework. With NCS, it's so vague. Spectrum seems to take loosely connected reports of situations and then someone - usually Colonel White or Captain Scarlet- makes a massive leap of imagination and decides that not only are the Mysterons behind it all, but they realise what the threat is, without much evidence, frankly. Of course, they're always proved right, but there seems little substance behind it.

That creates more difficulties for the NCS writer, because not only have you got to think of what the threat could be, you've also got to figure out how to present a sequence of events in such a way that Spectrum will realise there is a threat and who is behind it - that's as well as working out how they deal with it! I would have much preferred it if the NCS production team had stuck with the idea of the "announced" threat, as in OCS. It made the idea of the 'War of Nerves', another species toying with us, a lot more plausible than the type of random problems posed in NCS.

Maybe I'm a little grouchy about this because I'm having a few plot difficulties of my own where I am struggling for plausible answers to situations!

[Nike]

Yeah same here, the threat is easy to do, the solution is also something that is workable, but how the heck do we get Spectrum to know that a water pipe has broken and the water has been infected... thousands of water pipes break on a daily basis, and there are more things like that. In the series they make a massive leap of imagination and go and investigate that and of course they're right just like you said. That is very hard to write from a writers point of view, as you want to create something that is as plausible as possible.

Sometimes it is completely believable, other times it is just luck and sometimes it is just a trap (''Trap for a Rhino'', I like the way they did a little light show to draw attention and then use a Rhino to destroy the reactor, even though they also could just overload it or destroy it's cooling system causing it to melt-down.) There is no logic in it, at least no logic in our eyes. After all, a Martian evolution has gone very different then here on Earth, and if you see that some people have a logic that makes no sense to you... imagine how different ''logic'' can be on a different planet.

[Carrie]

Nike,
I've been enjoying reading your thought-provoking and intelligent posts,(as well as the responses to them!). It's always nice to have new members on the SHQ, and especially so when they contribute in the manner which you have been doing. I'm very impressed with your creative and skillfully rendered artwork, and it seems as if you have thought very carefully in advance about your ideas and scenarios within the confines of the NCS universe.
Looking forward to reading Dominion when it's published.

[Nike]

Thanks! And yeah, same here, I like to talk and exchange ideas like this, sure there is tons of stuff already on the site, and I am probably repeating stuff, but I just like to do a little brainstorm with you guys

And yeah, the ideas have been in my head for years in fact, ever since I first saw the series, I loved it, but I also felt it was cut short if you know what I mean. The concept of an Alien civilization at war with Earth, and a futuristic super-advanced military organization to counter them... has some really, really cool possibilities. But the fact that it was made for children, that is the reason the series is what it is. That the characters don't expose much of their emotion and most of the time arn't very complicated, but it's more action based. Which is great, but the scenes in ''Dominion'' with Conrad and Destiny and later with Conrad and Paul, or in ''Touch of the Reaper'' when Scarlet is doubting his own himanity and Blue giving his ''The Mysterons tried to kill you and replaced you with something else, but you we're to strong for them. Whatever they did to your body, Paul Metcalfe is still inside.'' Those scenes are -to me- some of the best in the series, as they portray the characters much more human rather then ''just military'' if you know what I mean. And when you're reading Fanfiction, there is suddenly this super-deep emotional side to all the characters, which makes me think that Fanfic is better a lot of the time then the TV series. But that is of course my view on it. So that's why I went for this style of Fanfic, combined with visual stuff, as the series is very visual based. The designs of all the vehicles, rooms, sets etc. is incredible, and I wanted to continue on that some more

[adam blue]

Yeah, i would like to of seen a few more emotional stories in NCS but as you say they're for kids. They like action not soppy stuff, most off the time. Adam and Paul got the most emotional stories lines, such as: HOMECOMING, SKIN DEEP and THE STORM AT THE END OFF THE WORLD.
Adam's words of wisdom, i thought, almost tear jerking. His friend needed emotional help and Adam said the perfect thing to help him. Which-to me- was suprsing. I never thought he had it in him!

Ohh fantastic idea for a story line by the way.
I'm guessing Scarlet and White is more intelligent in NCS the OCS then??

[Nike]

Indeed, I forgot to mention the scene in Storm at the End of the World, stupid me, that was the best one! But scenes like that... I just love it, but that doesn't make it a poor series, not at all (I don't want to end up at the stake! ) But a bit more emotion in it would have been nice.

Anyway, I've just send my third (and I hope final) draft of ''Dominion Part II'' to the beta readers, so I'm really looking forward to hearing what they have to say, what I've read so far is that they like it, but that it is obviously a beginners story, which is good and bad in my opinion The idea I have had for so many years now, I'd like to perform that in a way that does justice to the series and I don't want to sound unprofessional But that is why I really enjoy the Beta Readers comments, they really, really help!

But that said, I've also been working some more on my next Fanfic, trying to set up the guest characters, rather then creating them along the way. Anyways, thanks a lot for all your comments guys, it really means a lot to me!

[Marion]

Beta Readers are probably the hardest readers to please, Nike - after all, their aim is to do the story justice and to help the author to achieve the best result possible. Therefore, they may seem to focus on negative aspects, but comments are intended to be constructive. Even experienced writers make mistakes and I am always grateful when my beta reader points out some whopping plot gap or even a minor slip up that I've missed.
Suggestions for changes are just that though - you don't have to accept them - but I have found that it helps to have someone else read a story before it goes live, as an author always knows what s/he means, but the reader may not see things the same way. I am continually surprised to discover that readers have found more (or less) in something I've written than I ever realised was possible. It is more disappointing when you may have slaved over a scene or a speech or a plot twist that seems to have gone unnoticed. Authors are never satisfied!

[Nike]

That is so true! Not just as an author (if I can call myself that ) But also as a 3D artist, or even at work... my bar of satisfaction is very high, even when things are fine, I still look for ways to adjust or change it in some way

But the Beta readers, I've never had better constructive comments on work I've done! It's easy to get a ''wow, nice'' comment out of people, but a critique has much more use in my eyes! (even though to get dozens of people to comment on your artwork is never a bad thing! )

[adam blue]

Oh, no, never is bad to get positive feedback from people! I try and work the problems out when someone says: You use this word to much, or their not sure who's talking, when you have 2 or more characters. Thinds like that. You learn every time.
Good luck with your story! Hope he hasn't planted a bomb anywhere?

[Nike]

True And no, there aren't any bombs planted... just dropped

Just send my final version of the story, so it should be available in the next days/weeks. It's out of my hands now

So depending on the feedback I'm getting on this one, I'll go and work on the next stories Got plenty of ideas, a few already told here. Any ideas are always welcome though! But by just pulling out the paper I get inspiration enough... it's really sad actually if you think about it. But anyway, that's all for now

See ya guys!

[Nike]

Hi guys!

Well, Dominion Part II is finally up, I also just finished the first draft of my second story ''The Outbreak'', which will be send to the Beta Readers in the upcoming week, while writing the second story I suddenly felt like I massively improved since the first one, but that could also be my imagination, anyway here is Dominion Part II:

http://www.spectrum-headquarters.com/fa ... art_II.htm

Let me know what you think, or what could be changed/what is annoying to read etc.

[adam blue]

Waiting for a email to say it's been read by the beta-readers still!! I will read and let you know!
Good luck with your second story!

[chrisbishop]

Hi Adam Blue!

Nearly done with your story. Give us until the end of the week, and you should have a reply about it!

Nike, your story story has been received and is presently going through the beta-reading process.

At the moment, I'm also preparing the announcement for the upcoming Halloween Challenge. I wager that everyone visiting this forum knows about it?