Mistakes, Inconsistensies, and stuff
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hazel
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SNAP!

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Marion
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Intensity Angel
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The Beta Queen
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Marion
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Right. How do I explain it...
Is it okay if I explain via a small section out of one of my fan fics? Because I stumped how to put it into words.
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Intensity Angel
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The Beta Queen
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Forgive me if this is against the rules.
Sorry if any Americans are offended but the character Intensity Angel is a bit rude and a nightmare to her fellow teammates as well as Captain Blue.
Extract,
“Now just remember Captain, in Britain we don’t drive on the wrong side of the road,”
“Pardon Intensity?” asked Blue as the British Angel muttered under her breath.
“We drive on the right side of the road Adam,” replied Intensity as she started thinking up a line to wind up Captain Blue with.
“Okay, so we drive on the right,” repeated Blue knowing he shouldn’t as Intensity would bite him back later when he least expected it.
“Nope,”
“What?” asked Blue coming to a halt and crossing his arms. Now Intensity was just talking in riddles.
“In Britain we drive on the right, you Americans drive on the left, hence all the accidents that keep happening,” explained Intensity getting ready to catch Blue out.
“You cheeky little minx!” snapped Blue
“Well don’t drive on the wrong side of the road then! On second thoughts, I’ll drive,” finalised Intensity smirking at Blue who looked far from happy with his undercover partner.
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Intensity Angel
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