Valentine's Day Fiction
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What a lovely story, Cat2! You've painted a very touching portrait of a relationship between Melody Angel and Scott Tracy and in so doing, have depicted a very multi-layered and complex character in Scott; not always the saintly person of the TV series, but a more believable, well-rounded person who has ended up being to what he thinks the world wants him to be, rather than to himself. That has cost him, in terms of his relationships, as well as the way he lives his life in general.
A few lines I like;
"a resignation, a transfer order and teo green duffle bags."
"well-wishing, silence and both of them wanting to somehow reach across the gap that existed between them and save the other."
"And it was ten years till a Mysteron plot was defeated and Melody Angel saw Thunderbird One fly in."
Only nit-picking? I would have liked more of a clue as to how Spectrum and International Rescue co-exist together. Your timelines suggest that Scott and Melody had a past before Spectrum, but don't make it clear whether that was before, or during, Scott's involvement with International Rescue. You talk about Tracy Industries, but don't make it clear what Jeff is doing that will so jeopardise his sons' future. Perhaps a little more "tell" in the narrative would help.
Otherwise, jolly good show, looking forward to more!
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