Sweet Love of Mine

[Skybase Girl]

Well done, Sage !

Sorry for being a little tardy in commenting - it's been a bit busy in my house recently ! Still, better late than never, I suppose.

This was really very absorbing and I think it was a good move to split up your original narrative and treat this as a sequel to "Sweet Child of Mine". Little Ricky was a very convincing six year-old, with just the right range and mix of emotions.

In presenting Ochre & Magenta's families and friends, you created an engaging set of characters. The banter between Ochre and Magenta was both humourous and touching in places, although they could become likely contenders for the "Hinge & Brackett of Cloudbase" award !

Despite the lengthy dialogue, it didn't lose pace at all. Congratulations, look forward to the next completed work !

[Sage]

Awww thank you
I try to be all noble about writing for myself and the enjoyment, blah blah; but yeah everyone likes good feedback.

Yeah it was a complete monster for all concerned; maybe when I'm a big girl I'll manage a multi part.
That's a relief, research is helpful but I have been around kids that age for a long time so you never quite know.

Oh good, I am quite fond of them and seemingly it is my strength (if only by default).

Uh yeah me too, lol. It's shaping up, not as quick & easy as I'd like though.